People fly past, screaming. The huge rollercoaster looms over me. Whoa that looks cool. I line up for the massive roller coaster. The line was long. I was prepared.
I get closer to the roller coaster, it gets bigger and bigger. Maybe this wasn't such a good idea I think, as people zoom past screaming.
I slowly stumble over to the carriages. My mum tells me that the front was the scariest so I sat in roughly the middle.
I wonder how the seat belts work. I try pulling the black straps over my shoulder. They smoothly slide down but it doesn't stop me feeling unsafe.
I hear a hissing sound - the roller coaster is off. It slides smoothly around the corner on a 40% angle; well that wasn't too bad. The roller coaster soon comes to the chain. The chain slowly gets into action as it heaves the mighty load. Suddenly I realise what's coming next - the loop.
I see the loop coming. The roller coaster flies toward the loop. I quickly close my eyes. After a series of spins and turns the roller coaster skids to a halt. I slowly crawl off, my head spinning. My mum runs up to me “Was it fun”?
“Yes, let's do it again!”
While doing my writing I was learning how to make a good hook. I learnt that there are lots of different types of hook eg.
Use a question
Use descriptive words
Start halfway through with action
I think that I went well because I have a good hook that will convince people to keep on reading. I also built tension well.
Next time I will describe more.